My Memorable Meal

DRAFT 1

My Memorable Meal

By Mikey

My breakfast

I have a rumbly tummy when I wake up in the morning and cannot wait until my Coco-Crunch is prepared for me to eat.  When I eat my Coco-Crunch, it  fizzes in my mouth.  The Coco Pops looks like  choco-burst. The Maple Crunch has a vanillary taste; looks good as well.  That makes my tummy nice and full.

My tummy grumbles as i wake up. Yummyummyummy Yummy Yummy Yummy - there goes my coco-crunch!  Coco Pops and Maple Crunch mixed together creates “Coco-Crunch”! Chew-Chew-Chew-swalllow!!!!1!!! Its shapes are circle and double-square! They make sounds like “Popping crunch! Fizz! Vanillary!!”

I like it everyday! It gives me lots of energy to play and run!

DRAFT 2.

My Memorable Meal

By Mikey

My breakfast

I have a rumbly tummy when I wake up in the morning and cannot wait until my Coco-Crunch is prepared for me to eat.  When I eat my Coco-Crunch, it  fizzes in my mouth.  The Coco Pops looks like  choco-burst. The Maple Crunch has a vanillary taste looks good as well.  That makes my tummy nice and full.

My tummy grumbles as i wake up. Yummyummyummy - there goes my coco-crunch!  Coco Pops and Maple Crunch mixed together creates “Coco-Crunch”! Chew-Chew-Chew-swalllow!!!!1!!! Its shapes are circle and double-square! They make sounds like “Popping crunch fizz vanillary!!”

I like it everyday! It gives me lots of energy to play and run!

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I learned about Pop and Crunch are onomatopoeic words because the word sounds like the sound they make.